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All Together by ~ruchy:iconruchy:





I'm finding it harder,
to get through each day.
Though I know I have to,
Even if only to say:

It's getting harder to get by,
but you're my solitary why.

My legs are gone and I just don't know,
they took me farther than I thought I'd ever go.

I can't keep it all together.

There's a secret song that is your master,
it holds a truth that I can't erase.

There's some one who understands you,
more than I do.

I can't keep it all together.

Visions of you smiling happy,
are no longer with me.
There's a new burning,
Slowly I'm learning,
I can't have everything I want to,
but I just hope you take a piece of me with you.

There are things I would like to do,
but I'll never let them happen.

I can't keep this all together.

Where you go, I want to know.
Who you are, I already love.
I want to be the one.
But here I sit, alone.
The day is fading,
quickly coming, to take me home.

My legs are back under me,
but what good do they do me,
when you're not here beside me?

I can't keep this all together.

The bastards have ruined your confindence.
They never thought of the consiquence.

They pushed you around,
and now I'm going down.

I have felt the same, as you.
But you have one, who loves you.

Refuse to feel anything at all,
it's the beginning of a great fall.

There's no one who understands you,
more than I do.

I can't keep this all together.

It's getting too hard to,
make it through each day.
I'm falling apart now,
in everyway.

This is my life,
I'm not who I want to be.
I need you,
You're everything I dream.

I can't keep this all together,
I know I can't keep this all together.
Not while I'm alone.
©2005-2008 ~ruchy
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Submitted: May 17, 2005
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something i've been writing for a while...about lots of things i guess..hope someone enjoys..i know it's long...but it's a fast piece.

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~Deniz-Ay:iconDeniz-Ay: May 17, 2005, 5:44:11 AM
i think.. i dont knwo what i think, great piece. i truly loved it, something about it just drew me in from the very first line. great work boyo
~ruchy:iconruchy: May 17, 2005, 5:46:46 AM
it's a little choppy...was over 2 or 3 months in the writing.

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~angel60:iconangel60: May 17, 2005, 6:02:01 AM
very good, it says a lot. i enjoyed it.
!farores-wind:iconfarores-wind: May 17, 2005, 6:18:31 AM
Choppy?
David that's great, you can really see the feelings interchange from each line
It explains alot, in the little detail it gives

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~Dark-Priestess:iconDark-Priestess: May 17, 2005, 7:01:10 AM
Actually, although its long its great piece. The structure changes a lot though. Really like it.

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~koshibunni:iconkoshibunni: May 17, 2005, 7:47:20 AM
good job david....consequences is spelled wrong btw.....

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~ruchy:iconruchy: May 18, 2005, 1:28:37 AM
thanks, i'm still writing it though...there's more yet to come..just haven't polished the other stanzas yet. i appreciate your comment :)

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~ruchy:iconruchy: May 18, 2005, 1:30:21 AM
i intentionally changed the scructure a lot..it changes the metre and thus the beat of the poem. some parts are slow some are fast and i was pretty happy with my use of repetition.

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